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Rain pours down on me,
Choking, crushing, throttling me,
Until I can scream no more.

Knees buckle beneath me,
Tears cling to my eyelashes,
Blood sticks to my scraped knees.

(Why, why, why?
Why did you do this to me?
Why did it have to be me?)

I can feel the waves
Rolling toward me, thunder a
Hazy backdrop to my grief.

Bloody fingerprints leave smears
Of red across damp pavement,
My skin is cold, wet, bloodless.

(What did I do to deserve this?
I never hurt you—
Not like you hurt me)

My world is crashing, down, down, over me,
I cannot speak. I am mute. Silent.
I cannot breathe. I am dead. Gone.

Fire burns inside me, destroying,
Killing, hurting, but the rain sends
Fragments of cold through my heart.

(Blades flash through the edge of me,
Cutting, tearing, ripping,
Murdering me—who I used to be)

It doesn't get better. It never will.
But at least…I won't drown in this torrent
Of rain and heartache.

At least…you are no longer a part of me.
At least…at last…
I can breathe again.
Well, I finally got something done for the 100 Themes Challenge. XD I'm not totally sure that I am like, lovin' this poem the way I love some of my others, but at the same time, I'm rather pleased. XD As you can see, I decided to try the "in brackets thing" that Maia likes. XD I think I like it, too. ;3

I can't remember what number this is for 100 Themes....darn.

Time: about 10 minutes.

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Leap-of-Faythe Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is an amazing poem Mysty!! <333 The first word that comes to mind describing it is raw. It kinda reminds me of the scene in "Surprise" and "Innocence" where Angel loses his soul and runs out into the rainy alleyway. (At least that's the image that came to me, which I'm sure is no surprise to you. XD)
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